How to Write Your Essay for the Randolph-Brooks Scholarship

Brainstorming Across the Four Buckets

To create a compelling narrative, gather material across four key areas:

• Background: Reflect on your personal history. Consider experiences that shaped your educational aspirations and values. What challenges have you faced, and how have they influenced your path?
• Achievements: List your accomplishments, particularly those related to your education and community involvement. Quantify your impact where possible—mention specific projects, leadership roles, or initiatives you have undertaken.
• The Gap: Identify what you lack in your current education and how this scholarship will help bridge that gap. Be specific about your goals and how further study at Alamo Colleges will enable you to achieve them.
• Personality: Include details that humanize you. What are your values? What motivates you? Use anecdotes that reflect your character and commitment to your community.

Creating an Outline

Organize your thoughts into a coherent outline. Each section should focus on one idea:

1. Start with a strong opening that draws the reader in—consider an in-scene moment that captures your journey.
2. Follow with your background, detailing formative experiences.
3. Highlight your achievements and connect them to your future goals.
4. Discuss the gap in your education and how the scholarship will help you overcome it.
5. Conclude with a reflection on your aspirations and the impact you hope to make.

Drafting Voice and Style

As you draft, maintain an active voice. Use specific examples and avoid vague statements. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, and transitions should guide the reader through your narrative logically. Reflect on what you learned from each experience and why it matters.

Revision and “So What?”

After drafting, take a break before revising. Read your essay critically—does each section answer the “So what?” question? Ensure that your reflections are clear and meaningful. Seek feedback from peers or mentors, and be open to constructive criticism.

Common Pitfalls to Avoid

Steer clear of clichés and vague statements. Avoid phrases like “From a young age” or “I have always been passionate about.” Ensure that all details are accurate and reflective of your true experiences. Lastly, do not rely on overly complex language; clarity is key.